I think it was a formatting issue. The heading for whisper got pushed down or something. Anyway I enjoyed your (metaphysical?) poems--there’s inquiry, sonic texture, the pacing is on point. Very cool. Have you considered tweaking the form?
Tweaking the form to get the whispers fic toward the top instead of bottom? Or to make the poems different interesting formatting? I just put the story at the bottom haha, named the post after the story but threw in some random poems because i dont like just posting one poem alone, i kinda collage them into a piece together when i have a few written
I really like the constant interplay between images and poetry that you've used, it gives it a sort of scrapbook diary that makes it feel way more intimate and personal. Especially liked the lines:
Thank you 🙇🏻♀️ I wanna write short stories lol and I’m working on two painstakingly slowly idk why I keep writing poems but they’re flowing so I’m going with it
I think it was a formatting issue. The heading for whisper got pushed down or something. Anyway I enjoyed your (metaphysical?) poems--there’s inquiry, sonic texture, the pacing is on point. Very cool. Have you considered tweaking the form?
Tweaking the form to get the whispers fic toward the top instead of bottom? Or to make the poems different interesting formatting? I just put the story at the bottom haha, named the post after the story but threw in some random poems because i dont like just posting one poem alone, i kinda collage them into a piece together when i have a few written
I really like the constant interplay between images and poetry that you've used, it gives it a sort of scrapbook diary that makes it feel way more intimate and personal. Especially liked the lines:
among abandoned gods and gardens
All my love’s been satire
/ Break breath.
Thanks for sharing!
I do pretty much treat these poems like a visual diary in a way, mini mood boards 😆
Thank you! 🙏🏽
"It's gonna be ok...
...will it? "
Always will in the end 🫶🏼 thanks for reading
I liked this whole piece. But this bit really stood out for me:
“Typing twenty messages, unsent
Picking all the wrong battles
While you stopped fighting long ago
I’m at war with it all
The whole goddamn world
Looking for heaven in strangers
Finding myself in the black
Hurrying down the steps of hell”
— amazing! :)
Thank youuu 😄 can’t get away from the sad girl writing its blood deep 😆
Hahaha that’s alright. Let it out. Nothing wrong with some sad girl/boy writing. :)
Damn this is good. I love your writing, it’s so beautiful. I usually don’t read poetry but I want to read more of yours
Thank you 🙇🏻♀️ I wanna write short stories lol and I’m working on two painstakingly slowly idk why I keep writing poems but they’re flowing so I’m going with it
😍
Who painted that thin man with the tiny head?
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