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Gub's avatar

This was surreal. Stream of consciousness style drawing you into the very room Kane and Evy sit.

Even though the character is immersed there is something unsettling and it keeps you reading…unsettlement becomes present but subtly after the tea ceremony, it’s not dramatic and that’s why it lingers with the bizarre heart grafting…proper strange and intense, but intense in a gentle way..

Trip of a read, really enjoyed this.

Melissa Smith's avatar

Thank you :) I appreciate you letting me know you enjoyed it. I like that it’s surreal and a trip of a read

Gub's avatar

I genuinely enjoyed it. It’s refreshing to read something unique. :)

Ellis Wiens's avatar

"mbti-match app" Transplanting your partner's heart into your own body is a certified INFJ move, lol. I like the foreshadowing through the references to Eve and Adam.

Melissa Smith's avatar

Lmfao, clocked, I’m an infj

Michael Edward's avatar

The cult/spiritual/psychological themes definitely come through hard in this one. I think you captured the voice of the sorts of people who deal in these realms really well. I also really enjoyed the imagery you conjured up through your descriptions and metaphors. :)

Melissa Smith's avatar

Thank you! :) I do have some great shamanic and psychic friends who should write their own books haha, so I enjoy these themes

Michael Edward's avatar

As do I, very interesting themes, indeed.